Dean Forrester had the ultimate life. He had money, he had women, he never paid taxes and most of his days were spent playing golf and drinking for free. He was prepared to live out the rest of his days like this - until one phone call from home ruined it all.

Thursday, November 18, 2004

Aberration of Design

The Alpha Kappa Alpha fraternity house resided on the back lot of Samuels University. It was slightly older than the rest of the neighborhood and much larger. It also represented an aberration of design - every other house on the block was some form of square colonial whereas the AKA house was a warped kind of lazy Victorian design which never had the energy to reach gaudy or ornate but was certainly complicated.

OK, so I hit the 30,000 mark last night, mostly through the creative addition of Emma's babbling, some additional commentary on Chummy and Dean's musings on it and some additional dialogue. Bull gets introduced, and he's the vehicle for Dean's next episode, a brief detour of the college life that has to last me until 35,000 at least. I've decided I don't have a wall to worry about, I'm not particularly blocked per se - it's just that when there's this much text in the wake it seems rather weighty to try and bring it all to a close. The urge is to just ... end it. Be done with it. To be honest, though, the biggest problem Greenscape has right now is that it's teeth aren't fully bared. This all still feels like exposition that lacks the overall conflict of Dean's life. Well, I guess that's what December is for.


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